Friday, June 26, 2015

boiled rice slop

Carpe Diem Tan Renga Challenge #91, Basho's boiled rice slop


[...] "1694-summer. Basho uses less than elegant terms to describe both the rice dish and the man's wife. Notice how the sense varies as the second line twists so that there are two meanings. This is what Basho considered "lightness" or karumi." [...]

meshi angu kaka ga chiso ya yu suzumi

boiled rice slop
his old lady fans the treat
with evening coolness

© Basho (Tr. Jane Reichhold)


boiled rice slop
his old lady fans the treat
with evening coolness
© Basho
extra mouth to feed tonight
too much talk and no work!

©  Janice Adcock


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