Wednesday, December 2, 2015

mixing it up

Carpe Diem Haiku Writing Techniques #21 The Technique of Mixing It Up  

What is meant here is mixing up the action so the reader does not know if nature is doing the acting or if a human is doing it. As you know, haiku are praised for getting rid of authors, authors' opinions, and authors' action.

Here is an example by Jane Reichhold:
end of winter
covering the first row
of lettuce seeds
 
© Jane Reichhold
And here is an example by Basho in which he uses this technique:
meigetsu ya ike o megurite yomosugara

full moon
walking around the pond
all night


© Basho (Tr. Jane Reichhold)

This poem can be read with the idea that the moon "walks" around the pond as it seems to go from east to west or that the author walked around the pond the whole night enjoying the full moon. There is an association between the bright, that surface of the moon and the light-reflecting surface of a round pond.

winter rose
dancing in the wind
dressed in white

©  petra domina

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