Wednesday, November 26, 2014

the cold within the sound

 Carpe Diem Ghost Writer #35,
The Cold within the Sound:  Otagaki Rengetsu

Inspiration for this post was written by Jen.  In her essay Jen acquaints the reader with Otagaki Rengetsu.  Please, click here to read all of the post on this most wonderful haiku writer.

Upon
frost-withered arrowroot
pelting
vying hailstones—
the cold within the sound.

Otagaki Rengetsu (1791-1895)

Here is Jen's attempt to write in the same spirit as Rengetsu’s waka:

daggers of sleet – 
this sharp sound
cut sideways

"I (Jen) like this haiku but it’s definitely not in the same tone.  Perhaps a tanka would be closer?

this November sleet – 
it shreds the birch leaves 
in the dead grass – 
a sharp sound, cut sideways
tossed to the hungry wind

Where does Rengetsu’s “cold within the sound” lead you? "... Jen of Blog it or Lose it

encased in ice -
tree limbs drooping in arcs -
- cracking cold wood

cracking cold wood -
transformer's fiery sparks falling
broken power lines

broken power lines
darkness fills the frozen air
encased in ice -

encased in ice
trees sparkling in the sun
shivering limbs snap

blankets
fight the cold
silence
shattered by
the splitting oak

©  Janice Adcock

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